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:iconvalentinaxx:
Lovin the stories *wink*

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"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love. Listens, but doesn't believe. && Leaves before she is left"
- Marilyn Monroe [R.i.P] <3



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:iconterachi:
....and why didn't you tell the rest of us little friends that you had this place!
:iconzackurry2006:
haha, because, i hate it when my friends (like ones that i know peronally, at school) read these things... lol... sorry? you can tell the rest of them if you want, but i dont wanna... haha...
:iconterachi:
I personally hate talking to people I don't know well. I am always at a lost for words. A lot of times I don't respond to pictures or journals. I just don't have the time.
:iconmooing-toe-jam:
Oh my god, use capitals! Use paragraphs! FORMAT! Gosh! Use word or something, they'll be a whole lot easier to read and get off to that way.
:iconlightstep:
Not bad... But I do have a few comments to make. First, try to use paragraphs. It's really hard to read when it's just one solid page. It distracts from everything to lose one's place and spend a moment or two searching for it. My next suggestion is try not to use brackets in the story. Maybe that's just a personal thing, but I find that it kind of interupts what's going on. To be reading about how she's sliding her pussy up and down on your hard cock then to see something like (<--- HATE THAT WORD) really disrupts what's going on. You have a scene in your head of hot fucking then suddenly something breaking up the scene. It could be just me, but I think your stories would be better without being narrated in such a way.

I'm not trying to be picky, just offering some constructive critisim. Overall, they're pretty good. Making it easier to read would simply make them better.

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"Before this night is over, I will look down at your corpse and smile"
:iconorgygirl107:
Hey zack! i read your stories- theyre fucking great! sounds like you'd be a fun lay! lol!
:iconzackurry2006:
LOL!!! that was awesome when i read that! haha
hey, could you kinda... spread my name around deviantART? im too embarrassed to just say like 'hey, read my sex stories!' lol, so im gonna have other ppl recommend them or whatever to other ppl! thanks!
:iconorgygirl107:
lol i'll do what i can! im new to deviant so i dont know how much help i'll be!

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